Social Media Activism

I need help with a English question. All explanations and answers will be used to help me learn.

This is the question What role does social media play in organizing political and social protest ? How successful are social media organized campaigns?

I wrote the Social Media Activism “NEW ESSAY.doc”, Than the teacher read it and she told me I need to fix it

Teacher comments below

For Introduction: Well-developed introductory paragraph contains detailed background information, a clear explanation or definition of the problem, and a thesis statement which includes limited subject and attitude.

For conclusion: Conclusion summarizes the main topics without repeating previous sentences; writer’s opinions and

final thought (advice, prediction or suggestion) are logical and well thought out. Restates the thesis .

Body PIE Paragraph: Points are present but may lack detail and development in one or two. Some success at PIE format.

USE OF SOURCES Documentation: All source material is used. All sources are accurately documented, but a few are not in the desired format on the Works Cited page .Most sources are relevant and reliable. Sources must be from the prompt list unless you talked to me about it.

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