Admission essay

Can you help me understand this Writing question?

Please describe a specific experience with a patient during your duties as a volunteer or aide in a physical therapy practice setting that made a notable impression on you and affirmed your desire to pursue a career in this field. (850 words)

Although I participated in a multitude of volunteer opportunities in different practice settings, it was a clinical course at (University) that gave me the affirm on my desire to career in this field. It was my last semester before I obtained my undergraduate degree in kinesiology. Start of the semester with excitement and thrill waiting to know what the course has to offer. But It wasn’t clear enough that I would be working with patients with disabilities and real life trouble in their abilities. I became nervous due to the fact that the patient’s therapy and rehabilitation was in my hands for the next couple of months. The course was an aquatic therapy. The clients at the center receive adapted therapeutic exercise services and that these services are for the most part “post-PT”, meaning that they are in a different phase of their rehabilitation.

Long Story short. My client was diagnosed with TBI traumatic brain injury and had different type of diseases such as stroke due to his TBI. I work with inside and outside the pool. He couldn’t talk or make much movements as he had hemiparesis. Our time was so valuable and gave me a sense of gratification and personal satisfaction. At the end of the semester, when we had to say our goodbyes he started crying as I was wishing him good luck. He would just listen and make facial expressions. The caretaker knew he would want me to go to his birthday that was coming up so I went. This feeling was indispensable and invaluable.

THIS IS A BACKGROUND STORY ON MY EXPERIENCE, I HOPE YOU CAN FORM AND STRUCTURE IT INTO A WELL WRITTEN PERSONAL STATEMENT. PLEASE LET ME KNOW IF YOU NEED ADDITIONAL INFO.